My 2nd draft of Proposal

Hi Guys,

I revised my proposal. I thought my synopsis need more detail.
I really want to know your opinion...

Jenny


Title: Journey

This story begins when a mother and a daughter discover that they both have cancer. As the illness progresses, their estranged relationship becomes more volatile due to their character clash. The daughter expresses her emotion with anger and disbelief; however, the mother embraces the news with courage and optimism. The mother‘s heart breaks as she see her daughter struggle with accepting the illness. Now she is more determine to fight the cancer to prove that the illness can be overcome, and yet she is struggling with her own doubt and fear. They both begin to realize that they are not alone in this battle; they have each other. Throughout this journey, they discover their faith, hope , and love for each other. At the end, the mother dies and her daughter lives. The daughter embraces her new journey with great hope and love from knowing her mother’s spirit will always be by her side.