My plan for narrative essay~!^^

Derek suggested that I use the 3rd person, so I changed the voice for more detail story.
He also told me that 6 paragraphs are enough for my essay.
Based on his suggestions, I wrote my plan for narrative essay.
I hope you guys feel free to read~!^^

Narrative Essay Assignment
1.This paragraph is about Sujin’s first meeting with her (future) husband Minho, their courtship, marriage and the subsequent problems.

2.Sujin waits for Minho so that they can make up after a bad quarrel. However, she watches the shocking news of a subway bomb explosion and starts to panic, worried about Minho.

3.She got a call from the hospital to come and identify a corpse. However, she did not accept that it was Minho, so she went to the hospital to make sure whether it was her husband or not.

4.After she recognized that it was Minho’s body, she was in shock and came back home with her husband’s belongings.

5.Sujin regretted fighting with Minho and lost all hope. Moreover, she could not overcome her feelings of guilt. Finally, she tried to kill herself.

6.When she woke up in the hospital, she heard that she was pregnant and she found a new hope. Now she has a baby boy and promised herself that she will make a delightful life with Minsu.

Wow...sad yet joyful. But her having a baby makes life more promising for the joy that will come. What is the title to your story?

this is really touchable story.
is this based on the true story? and about the daegu subway bomb incident?
this story reminds of me that accident because i am from daegu
and my sister lost her friend by that accident.
i really like the end of story that sujin has a baby with minho
good luck on your story

interesting story line qiut intreging
i would agree with Derek and change the story to third person it would be to much to write if it was in first person
Well done keep on doing the great job